You need to write more! I am hooked... Thanks
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it's a good story but some things are confusing cuz after edward and seth ripped riley into pieces they burned what was left in eclipse so u would have to add how he escaped. also after bella was turned her powers helped her self control and kept her from drinking human blood.
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I like the idea of Riley coming back, since it was never clarified that Riley was killed. But the book needs work
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before you start adding to the story run it through a scanner and correct the spelling needs a spell check real bad
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Honestly, there are a lot spelling and grammar mistakes. You really should have proof-read a couple of times before you uploaded it.
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I liked it. I love the Twilight Saga also and I can admit I have thought of numerous different scenarios that could have happened to keep the story line going. Stephenie Meyer's Saga is what gave me my love for reading and I can never thank her enough for showing me that everybody loves to read you just have to know what to read to suit yourself.
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