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I think you have a great story line here, it seems to me either there is grammar error's (which is typical in a draft) or language barrier issues. I'm leaning towards the latter of the two. If you want some suggestions let me know. I think you have potential for a great story though! :)
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Thanks. It is a language barrier issue, since english is not my native language. :) Every suggestion is very, very, very helpful.