Valerie: You write from the heart....Your experiences are so sweet. I was shy once and know now that everyone has the strength to jump away from shyness. Sometimes one has to take a chance....Just jump!
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i liked your story..keep me posted if you right more..
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Thanks for your comment and for making my story one of your favorites :)
your welcome :) i was just really captivated by the tone of innocense your story has
So far so good, but please keep track of your tenses. At times you're looking at the story from above, other times its as if things are occurring in the present and you are experiencing them as they go along. And careful of too many of the same words in one place ex: karate people and the word golden to describe the boy and his hair.
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Thank you for your comments and I appreciate the suggestions for improving my story. :)
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. Yes, I hope too that someday I'll overcome my shyness. Thanks for the advice. :) ^_^