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Pretty good :) Very imaginitive and captivating! A few small spelling errors but mostly I was thinking the story could be expanded. If you put more dialogue and descriptive text in to set the scenary, you could easily make what you have a third longer again and more vivid in the process. A very original idea though, I'm impressed :)
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