BookRix

I appreciate your honesty and time. I will take it down and work on it some more. Just a novice, but sincere. Roz

what the plot was here. The dialogue seemed real enough but they didn't seem to advance the story. The good news is you made small mistakes as far as grammar and punctuation. I would work on making the story a little more vivid. The conflict was hazy. This doesn't mean its a bad story. In my opinion it just needs a little work.