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Review - In reading a writer's work, I concentrate first on story construction. Does it catch my interest and pull me in, is it going somewhere, what it is telling me. I found the start interesting, but you could shave a little and get right to the heart of this gem. Also, I noticed, that overall your translation was very good. Spelling was good, but you are struggling with joiners like - the - is - of, etc.
What I liked most about your story was how her friend Linda, helped her understand how she would eventually heal her heart. Your description of Karma was interesting and interwoven into the story line very well.
You have a very down to earth 'voice'.
I could feel this characters pain. I liked how you described her job at work as well.
Some editing would bring this story up a notch, but overall, good job. I enjoyed it. Robynn