Great story, i love how your words draw me in at the first page. Brilliant. Just want to add that I'm a great ebook cover designer. You can give me your picture and suggestion of how you would like it to look and I'll make it happen.
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Heyy!! Just started reading this and its really good! Some feedback:
Try to not keep all of the writing in bunches of paragraphs but separate them whenever you are describing a new piece of information to the readers like when you describe a person (the husband and kidnappers), start a new paragraph.
Or when a new event happens like she noticed the car following her, start a new paragraph, when she hears his voice, start a new... mehr anzeigen
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Also, when paragraphing, space it out too. Like with mine, I did paragraphs but they are too close still so here it how it could be:
Heyy!! Just started reading this and its really good! Some feedback:
Try to not keep all of the writing in bunches of paragraphs but separate them... mehr anzeigen
Omg thank you so much for that feed back. I will go in today to do some editing to make it more understanding. I super appreciate your feed back and I will make those changes, thank you so much, my first reader!!!!! It will be completely updated by Sunday.
My book has been updated, I cant wait for more feedback
Aww great thank you and that sounds like a great idea, I will message you.