BookRix

wheres the book?

that was an edit i made and wanted to keep off for a little bit. lol oh well i just forgot when i took it from word... well now im getting the filling i should finish the book thanks :)

It seems like you have a good start on this. Running it through a spell check wouldn't hurt, but other than that you have an intriguing start. My only question is on the last paragraph you put down that the first week a girl asked Clare if she'd eat her. I want to make sure I'm understanding it right, it's basically public knowledge that Clare's a vampire? Also, make sure to always start a new paragraph for dialogue. Other than that you've got a good start. Keep going and working at it!

I like the start of this. It's new and I want to read more.