BookRix

Ah! This is such a good book! I love it so much and I really hope you will keep writing because your so good. I love it. Keep it up!

Loving the new cover!! Definitely looks way grungier and grittier now =)

Ooh, it's pretty :)

Epic! I love the idea for how they use their minds to communicate with one another. Some parts gave me a few chuckles as well.

Overall, it was more than worth it to read this!

Wow, this is really different and not at all what I was expecting!! It's original and really cool and I love it. Only thing I noticed was sometimes you have a few mistakes with your dialogue structure... For example, remember to put a comma at the end of dialogue instead of a full-stop (usually). Lemme know when you have more up!! =)

You could use some punctuation in a few parts of the story , and there are some spelling errors, but apart from that, I love the set up :) I like how you point out the quirks in a girl having the name Alexander and they dynamic between all the siblings :) great job so far

I like the story, and the story concept. It is very interesting. The only thing is I was getting bogged down in the minutia. Too many little details that do not add to the story.

"I rolled out of bed." OK, but "I went to the closet and put on a blue shirt with some skinny jeans and my grey boots" Is this of any importance to the story? if it is, then leave it in, if not then "I got dressed" is enough.

"Then I walked to thew bathroom. The door was closed so I knocked and waited.
"Yes?" My 17 year old brother Trey called.
"Hurry up I need the bathroom Trey" I said.

Try I called to my 17 year old brother, "Hurry up Trey, I need the Bathroom." The door opened and he walked out, O.K. sis it's all yours.

Well you get the point. Less is more. We don't need a second by second account of what is happening. It is more interesting if you let the readers fill in some of the details with their own imagination. All you have to do is to guide them in the right direction.

Keep working on it. You have a very good beginning.

I still love your book.

I love it! though the errors (They don't really bother me much, I usually watch the story line and characters closely), I found it very enjoying and entertaining to read! Keep up the good work love!!!

highly interesting. the whole thing is really good. of course there were some word errors here and there but to be honest who hasn't made a mistake? :)

you did really well, I hope to see more. PS the cover is really cool, make it yourself :)?