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i am so sorry for the loss of your dad

good story

i liked it

that was really good but kinda depressing...why is everything so depressing to me today? my friends monologue in drama's depressing, health class is depressing, people keep singin concrete angel for some reason...
srry anyway its awesome!

FIXED IT!! idk why it cut off, but i fixed it. go read the rest of the book nao!!

i like it good job :) and i love the song from evenscencea bring me to life!! lol but really good job :)

on page 7(idk if it my computer just didn't load it or what) it just stopped in the middle of a sentence and didn't have anything else...
What I read of it was really good though :D

Thanks. unfortunatly thats how my mom would react (i have done that) so really its ok. and thaks. i will check in on those commas. also when you read the suicide part, listen to Possibility by Lyye Li it gives it more effect.

A rather sad story you have here, but yes this sort of story do happen in real life. It was a good read, and the way you portrayed the suicide scene in the end was great.

*I do have a few things I would like to suggest. I was surprised at first when she slapped her mother, and I think I would expect more emotion/reaction from her mother there. There were also some few typos and tense changes and perhaps you could also change some periods to commas.

But overall, it was an interesting story, though a little dark and like I've said, sad.

Thanks for the read :)