Forget, forgot, forgotten..., three breathless words!
yours Victoria Vanderbilt
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Art is beautiful when you create it from a heart as beautiful as your's. Keep writing amazing books, I believe in you.
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nice book
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Thank you
It's going really good! please update soon.
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I think it's really good so far and has an amazing amount of potential. I get what you meant about the repetition. The level of feeling that goes with it is amazing and very skillfully done. I look forward to reading the rest of it.
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Good beginning. Yet you need to fix errors...some spelling, but mostly letters in wrong orders. ..like woudl instead of would. and others.
Also you repeat a lot. Many sentences start with 'she'. Also there's one paragraph that 6 sentences begin with 'maybe', and 4 with 'always'.
Apart from those, the story has great potential...you need to continue.
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The repetition is meant for a reason. Its used to get a point across. When I write "maybe" it illuminates her uncertainty. I'm also only talking about on person, so 'she' is better than repeating the name a hundred times. I fixed the errors in the lettering. (I deleted the... mehr anzeigen