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What an abusive story. I'm glad its *fiction*. But good.

Love it so far! Cant wait for more!

This is pretty good. There are a few errors but they are clearly visible. I'm sure when you look back over your work you will spot them instantly. The storyline is very well formed and pretty well written. I can't wait to see what happens next. :)

Everybody should show some love by liking this book or faving it. This lady did a good job. She showed us how good she is with details and writing and lets support her. :)
I like this book :)
-Jasmine <3333333333333333

The story instantly grabs the reader's attention. I love how you describe the situation and make the reader curious to why she is running away. The main character is very likeable. You have a unique way of writing- it is lovely. I look forward to reading more.:-)

Maybe Adam will be a better husband for Sam. Please tell me when you'll write more. I began liking love stories like this.

I like this story. You did a great job of bringing up the conflict and bringing it to the resolution. In between you gave more than enough detail that Samanatha wanted to escape the horror of a life she was facing and find an escape. You emphasized this point with the scene where she wanted to fly away.

Your sentences are a little choppy. Try adding a little sentence variations with complex and compound sentences. Maybe a bit more imagery?

We find no wrong with curse words here, especially since your rating is 14 and up. Either change the word to the actual one, or change it to a euphemism.

I like where it's going now. Please keep writing, and I hope to see more from you!

~H

On page three where it says "Come out a play" , that should be "Come out and play."

Overall so far this book is on a right track. Now with that first chapter you opened a lot of new questions from a readers point of view. So as your plot develops and your characters grow, make sure you answer those questions.

In the next chapter it's up to you as a writer if you want to of course one of the most important elements in a book, defining your setting, characters, and plot. Is the protagonist stuck in the memories of what the guy who was chasing her has done to her and with Adams help she falls in love or however..its up to you as the author. Whatever you do keep in mind if your protagonist is going to be a dynamic or static character, so that you can form your plot and setting(s) around it.

Yes I said a mouthful. Sorry ! But good luck writing the book and please continue. I'm looking forward for more.

~Jillian

Good book.