this is really a good story
please keep writing
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Nice story. Can't wait to read the rest :)
However, I do have a few critiques:
First off, the beginning starts real fast pace and I have to seek out bits and pieces of information about the characters and settings. This isn't all together bad, but make sure you let the reader know enough of what's going on that they don't get confused.
Now, a lot of the action you describe reads like a list. He did this, she did... mehr anzeigen
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Thanks, that helped me alot. I'll get too it when im not busy with my school crap either. :)
Thank you, I know that there is some grammar errors. I plan on fixing them when im all done with the book.
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Man that's the most enticing book I ever read! You got some grammar and phonetic errors, but dang it was great.. I look forward to more.
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haha, ok i'll deal with it cough-lies-cough
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it's good so far. can't wait till you write more. and i have worked on my book. just not updated it yet. so deal with it. kk? lol
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it's good so far. can't wait till you write more. and i have worked on my book. just not updated it yet. so deal with it. kk? lol
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it's good so far. can't wait till you write more. and i have worked on my book. just not updated it yet. so deal with it. kk? lol
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Haha no, i like have ppls opinions. thanks.
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