BookRix

I mean all of this in the most non-offensive way. Ton's of misspelled words. Also there is constant tense slipping(between present and past tense). Also, there are spots where you suggest she is talking, but don't actually use dialogue. Also beyond misspelling, i saw a few instances of you using shorthand/texty. In writing, you should never for example, have her look at a pic...yes we all know what a pic is...but a pic is shorthand modern texty, and has no place in a well written story, take the extra half second to write picture. The only exception to that would be in a story set in modern times and the only place you could use it, would be when someone is actually talking, like "Hey, check out this pic." I said, and handed her my phone.

Problem do not hate it acted up

added more and still adding

Oh, you don't need to finish, you need to bloody start!

Seriously, it will need work but the draft, oh my.....potential is in the air!

Please say if u think this is a story I need to finish