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i relly like this book

i like this book it is about a girl who fells into a deep sleep.

i like this book it is about a girl who fells into a deep sleep.

Love the story and I found it to be well written.

I would suggest using a standard type set, Times New Roman or Ariel, only because I almost gave up reading it due to the distraction of the type.

I did bull through it because I thought it was worth the read. Its very important to note that content is what keeps your reader interested. The few mistakes you made can be fixed but the talent to spin a story is something you either have or you don't. You have it, and will only continue to hone your craft as you get older. Great Job!

loved it <3 :)

Thank you for the comment, just editting the book right now actually. xoxoxo

I think you've done really well at creating the mood in this book. Admittedly there are quite a few grammatical and puntuation errors in this that need to be addressed but I think you've done really well. The opening is fast paced and you can feel the confusion of the character as she's running for her life. Just make sure you check the punctuation!

Thank you for the comment and the heart, it's just a rough draft at the moment but I'm going to edit it xoxo