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hey.! you need to write more on your book angella smith. like now please?! o wanna read more!!

add more please

Pretty good start. I can imagine the scene very well, and think this will make a fantastic story.

To help the flow in that quick change in perspective, try changing "The girl's name was Angela Smith" to "That was me. My name is Angela Smith". I think that will help make it go smoothly. 8)

Good luck!