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For me, I favor stories like this. i honostly dont care about the grammer right now, but this is a good story! tell me if you write anything else like this!
~CrystalC
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I think you have a story there, but you need to work on your grammar.
Also the cursing added nothing to the story at all.
I have nothing against rude language, If it is in character, and adds some dimension to the story line, but just using it when it adds nothing to the story is a waist of ink.
Try asking someone for help in editing your work. And keep trying.
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I might be old school, but for me the writing was painful, did not flow, and seemed to be written in modern text chat style.
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It's good it just has some grammar errors. I liked it.
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