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No worries, there's def going to be more. Don't know how long it will take though, i've been kinda busy (:
thanks for the fav ♥

i hope you write more.

ahh amazing

while reading this i was freaking out and my sister was in the room like o.o

love it as always love how he can get emotional

The main body of your story is well written.
However, the beginning of your story is confusing and needs tightening up more.
I feel a little more description and less dialogue, may be the key to this story.
I was also confused by the word 'retard'. Does the character have a disability, or are you referring to their low level of intelligence?
Chris

awesome love it

i was kind of confused at first but then i understood good so far add more please

i almost cried i love this add more