I hate to be rude. And it is a good book. But everything in it is happening to fast slow things up a bit and give more detail...I bearly knew what was going on... Also work a little on you grammer...And no offense but i hate when people take someone elses book and add on to. I think you should leave it to stephanie myer to decide what happens to Jake and Nessie I mean they are her characters after all not yours.... I just... mehr anzeigen
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it was nice , detailed , but you miss spelled the words [same]
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thank you all for reading it and to all those haters I don't care if you hate it or not but you likers or lovers tell me what i need to work on!
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can you tell me what you thin of it now.
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I believe it does need a tad bit of work. Specially with the font. I'm sure you'll do good there are plenty of Twilight fans here.
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I am sorry to say, but this was entered into a contest about your work, not Stephanie meyers unthought ideas... I'm sure that you have wonderful ideas, and I am not meaning to sound rude, but this is more of Fanfiction.
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It could use a little polish, but congratulations:)
Perhaps lower the font size, too, to say 12 point? When I opened the book the size of the type FRIGHTENED me:) Made me jump!
Ask friends to read it for you...check your sentence structure and spelling. Keep refining your work:)
Best to you!
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