BookRix

Great book

It's a good story idea, however you could use some work with sentence structure, and everything is a bit rushed and messy, making it hard to read. Some editing and it'll be a good story.

P.S. Maybe consider changing the font and making it a bit smaller, too. It'll also help with making the book easier to read after editing.

Look your book is to jumbled it would confuse the readers the way you have written it

It was good but, i think you should add more details. Also Uppdatttte, tell me when you do :)

I will

add more lol

But you need to work on your writing... And mechanics... But great story idea :)