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I have to 'echo' Judy, with her assessment of this writing. With regards to the character POV's, I suggest you try breaking them into chapter sections, which are clearly defined, but don't do so many changes at once ad dont mix them up.
At the beginning I saw way too many 'I's'. It was off-putting. I think you either need to address that or make (I) into third person and stick with it.
I also think you should remove the photos.... mehr anzeigen
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This book is amazing! a unique use of reincarnation and love. Good job J.J!
Keep up the good work!
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thanks so much for that kind comment.
It is always good to hear what people think of my books. Don't worry I'll be writing more as soon as I can.
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An interesting take on fan fiction, and a unique use of reincarnation. I like the story idea, but found the constant jumping from one character to another a bit disconcerting. The timeline of events was also a bit jarring and confusing. Having said that, I think you should continue this, maybe put it into actual prose form to make it flow better. A few spelling mistakes and such, all of it easy to fix. Generally, though, it... mehr anzeigen
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