The return of the Slayer

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The return of the Slayer
Echo thought she was just another normal girl in the world of High School. To be exact Finagean High. Where the princpal is weird, and where a kid is a teacher. Boy was Echo wrong about herself....


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writingmum

I have to 'echo' Judy, with her assessment of this writing. With regards to the character POV's, I suggest you try breaking them into chapter sections, which are clearly defined, but don't do so many changes at once ad dont mix them up.

At the beginning I saw way too many 'I's'. It was off-putting. I think you either need to address that or make (I) into third person and stick with it.

I also think you should remove the photos.... mehr anzeigen

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destiny4ever

This book is amazing! a unique use of reincarnation and love. Good job J.J!
Keep up the good work!

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whymylifesucks

thanks so much for that kind comment.
It is always good to hear what people think of my books. Don't worry I'll be writing more as soon as I can.

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judycolella

An interesting take on fan fiction, and a unique use of reincarnation. I like the story idea, but found the constant jumping from one character to another a bit disconcerting. The timeline of events was also a bit jarring and confusing. Having said that, I think you should continue this, maybe put it into actual prose form to make it flow better. A few spelling mistakes and such, all of it easy to fix. Generally, though, it... mehr anzeigen

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