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Hima, you are really coming into your own. This is very good. I'm so proud of how you have worked hard on grammar, spelling and punctuation.

Changing View Points is a challenge. It takes practice. In a few places you struggled, but I understand. I have trouble with it myself.

To break a scene and go to another point of view put ********* (as-tricks) between the scenes. This tells your reader there is a change coming.

This story is sounding really good. Can't wait to see where it goes. Let me know when you add to it. I'd like to read it. Great Job. Robynn

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At times, it was hard to follow because I didn't know who was speaking, but others, I could easily visualize everything. Like when Selena described Evan, I could easily imagine a gorgeous man with honey eyes. Or when Evan mated with Selena. That too, was easy to follow. Keep me updated!

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