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I am still working on meter,as you can tell some of these poems are not even in terms of syllables.Thanks for reading and I have entered a number of my poems in contests.As Old As The Sea actually came in third place in the May 2010 voicenet contest.

Review - Christmas Tree Memories, Thirty Years Ago, The First Christmas Eve, were my favorites. I think the Christmas Tree my very favorite, because it captured my thoughts exactly when decorating every year.

I love your 'voice.' You really are quite good at creating scenes and emotions in such short, compact lines. I hope you have tried to put some of these poems in writing contests. I think you would do well. Great job. Robynn

very good. touching. i liked it. good writing. thank you, joe price

Franny,
Thank you for sharing your poetry with us. I really liked the poem, "That First Christmas Eve."

Please consider reading and voting for my book, My Reflections, which is also a poetry book.

Thanks for your comments Carmen,

I am sorry about your losses as well.I am going to edit parts of my book,and maybe come up with another poem in the process.Good Luck to you also!

Thanks for the read and advice Dennis.I am going to re-edit over the weekend.I am taking yours and Robbotinas'advice.I welcome any detailed criticism privately.Good Luck to you.I love what I have read of your work,but wasn't able to download anything.I am impressed with all of the contest participants'so far!

Deeply moving poetry about loss of loved ones, a part of life that we share. Like Robottina's comment, I would like to point out that, for me, the spelling and grammar errors took away from the power of the words and the quality of the writing. You still have the opportunity to re-edit. In addition to the suggestions already made, I am happy to offer my specific thoughts as well.

I think you are at your best when you write about something you are passionate about and through your personal experiences. I like the descriptive qualities in most of your poems. Use of the senses draws the reader in and they are able to feel as if they are experiencing the event you are writing about. My sincere condolences to you and your family on the death of your brother. I do not know when it happend, but time is irrelevent...it stays with you for a lifetime. My sister passed away 2 years ago, so I can relate to loss. Writing is a great outlet and you allow the reader to feel your emotions. Thank you for a great read! :)