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        Thank you for the people who had been helping me so far

            I dedicated this first book to you... 

               You're all wonderful.. Love you.. 

 

Vinier Shawn is 17 years old smart, beautiful but unloved girl. Her parents were divorced when she was little. Her mom remarried to a divorcee with one daughter the same age as her. Her mom loves her step daughter more than her own because she doesn't love Vinier's dad. She was simply a modern cinderella. 

 

Davis Morgan is a handsome and popular guy in school. He is the captain of the basketball team. He is just the opposite of Vinier who is a loner and a bookworm who always called as nerd by the cheerleaders and the rest of the students.

 

What will happen to Davis and Vinier after he invited her to the party at his house? 

Let's see.. 

 

Hope you will like my very first book... 

 


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Betty

I love this book very much.. The storyline is really interesting. I liked the characters very much. Two thumbs up Dee. I'm sure it will be a success..
Best of luck..

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Dee

Thank for the compliments, I just happened to have a good imagination but as an author I'm still far from good. Will need your support to move forward. ❤️❤️❤️

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judycolella

English is a tough language, even for those born to it. Knowing this, I read the story for its content and continuity, its plot, characters and heart. That's where all great stories begin, after all.

You've written a compelling story line with a beginning that captures the interest of your readers immediately, and impels them to continue into the subsequent chapters. The main character, Vinier, is instantly three-dimensional... mehr anzeigen

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Dee

Thank you once again Judy, you've been such a great help...
GBU...

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Gelöschter User

The story is good. You might consider pairing up with a friend and going over your chapters one at a time and asking for help with the grammar. But otherwise, I like the story.

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Dee

Thank you Serenity.. I will work hard to improve on my grammar. For the chapters, i was thinking on editing them, because I have problem uploading my update.

Gelöschter User

Yeah, I understand. It wouldn't let me upload individual chapters for my books. I had to upload it all at once, then cut and paste the chapters to separate them. I wish there was an easier way to upload updates but if there is, I haven't discovered it yet.

Dee

I've been searching here and there, but their suggestions just like yours. I think i'll just do what you recommended. Thanks again. You've been a big help to me. ❤️❤️

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ebell1

I think you have a good idea that will reach out to a younger audience and give them a chance to like your characters. My only issue was the spelling and grammar made it a little hard to follow. Editing is a pain I've had to edit mine 6 times now but it's an important part of the story. *thumbs up * I'd like to see this refined and more work into the characters.

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Dee

Thanks ebell1. I will work harder to make it better. About my grammar or spelling i will try to improve. My English is not very good, so i need dictionary most of the time.

ebell1

I understand i only know english but my spelling is terrible! Is there a software you could look up to make it easier for you? That will translate what you type? Maybe someone on here might know of one

Dee

Let's find out together

ebell1

*thumbs up*

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Dee

Hi :) this is my first book, please give me your opinion. All critics are welcome..

Please don't mind about misspellings, my English is not very good..

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