This is a good story. I have voted for it and think with a little work it will be very good. Thank you for sharing.
Carol x
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Your story was written with many American mistakes. You, being a foreign author, are excused for this type of venue. Several occurances of leaving out the words 'is,a,s's, and r' on pages: 8,9,14,15,20 and others, stood out as errors. There is a program that can correct these mistakes called "White Smoke.com./joeparente
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Thank you very much for your valuable suggestion. I will certainly take care. We follow British English. So there are differences in spelling such as Colour or tyre. In American English it is Color and Tire.In fact The Mirosoft Word what we normally use makes corection... mehr anzeigen
There is a smooth flow in which the story is told. Well written.
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Very touching story! Emotions, values and principles of the main character are captured very well.I liked the line from the story - "Marriages are made in Heaven. You meet your life partner according to Karma made in your previous life."
An entertaining piece!
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I am very happy to receive such encouraging comments from you. I am not aware of your hobbies/interest? So far I am concerned, I am in various activities like oil paintings, participating in philatelic exhibition, learning Hindi songs on key board and off late in writings. I... mehr anzeigen
I like the story but I think you should do more show don't tell. Most of the times you are just stating facts. There are a couple grammatical errors but the plot is really unique. I liked reading it! Thank you.
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Hi
Thanks for your comments. I have made a note of that.
With best wishes
Binod Sinha
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