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I found your story interesting although it does need an edit for spelling, grammar and word usage. The errors detracted from the story line so I am afraid if you don't fix it before sharing it, many potential readers will opt out on deciphering it.

The concept of a girl who sees the past unfortunate events in others is quite an idea. I see how you try to show how she copes with this often inconvenient talent. I think the story line has definite appeal and you convey her feelings well but you have to clean up your errors to really attract a wider range of readers. If you take your time I am sure you can do a lot of improving on your own and if you need help don't hesitate to ask. We are all here for each other. That's how we learn.

totally aheso0me!!!!!

A few errors here and there but I liked it, all the same. And one more thing, WILL SOMEONE tell me why Carter reminds me of Patch. In the Hush Hush books?!

loved it!

It's really good. Please write more!!:D