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HI, I read ur poem I really like ur style although I dislike the idea of alcohol (it is what I have been taught). I'm not that good at poems : ( Here is my short story from Swap Shop.
http://www.bookrix.com/_ebook-c-kelemen-the-winter-mill-murder/
only 406 words long in this story.

Well, this was an interesting interpretation. Well done. I think this was a beautiful piece that was well described and full of vivid images.

Bravo!

Well done :)

My only piece of advice would be to change the cover of your book. That's the only thing that turned me off.

Awesome job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

Funny that somehow I missed this excellent little poem.

I can't comment from a personal point of view, but you put your finger on an emotion that many men have experienced...cold, but burning, intoxicating (in every sense of the word), and making him forget everyone else. This is something universally know by (nearly) everyone, and your prose put a unique "streetwise" spin on it. Good, good job. 5 stars:)

Thanks Chireau! I was considering tweaking it a bit and then posting it for a contest and for the Olive Tree Review :D

I loved the poem and the comparison between a female's curves and the curves of the bottle of wine that the person in the poem was consuming. The only thing that I would have liked to see was a stanza break before line ten. It would make the word love stand out much more and it would make a better transition between discussing the physical features that made the bottle so appealing and the deeper meaning that the bottle of alcohol held for the person in the poem. Other than that I loved it.

Thanks. I actually write a lot of poetry. I might post up a few more poems that I've written recently :)

Such a nice poem about such a horrible subject.
You should continue writing poems, I think you really have potential.

I'll try. I might post up another poem soon

make more plz

heyyy girll! its ashley from your creative writing class. i really liked this! i almost heard it as a song! me and you should write something together, i think we write similarly! keep up the good work!