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sorrysorrysorrysorrysorry!
SEPTEMBER 17! not november 17!
some dude called kevin tan pointed it out to me.
xD

OUTRAGE!!
next time updates will be NOVEMBER SEVENTEENTH!?!??!

thanks all users for reading and replying! i really appreciate that.
just to let you know, i have added a tiny part of chapter two. also, i have decided that im not going to update chapter by chapter, but by every five chapters!
keep reading!

ps: next time i plan to update will be november 17th

GO AMETHYST!!

great start!
UPDATE MORE!!!

i love the poem at the beginning of the chapter! great start! i also love when you talk about the dancing beam of light :) i also love the physical description of her mother!

here are some things to fix:
page 8
add a comma here: "work later than usual, exhausted, but happy"

"passed down around my family" should probably be changed to "passed down
through my family"

"every child of the Everblade clan where" - i think you meant to write "were" but it should really be "was" because you say "child" singular.

page 9
"referring to sleep and eat" should be "preferring"

"I followed the path the Mother's garden" should be "to Mother's garden"

you should probably change "I say" to "I said"

"gracefully floated in the garden" should be "into the garden"

page10
"couldn't ignore that fact that" should be "the fact that"

i absolutely love the ending of this chapter. i can't wait for you to write more. make sure you update me again when there's more!!!

This is a good start to what i hope is going to turn into an awesome book! Now all you have to do is write write :P Good luck

i sense a good story in the making!
really great start!

let me know when you add more!!!

Great visual start.