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:) Thank you for the critism (by the way, I don't find any of your comments rude- I live for critism like this!) I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I think I'll be posting some of my more recent work in the coming days :) I anticipate more of your feedback and thank you for taking the time to read my story :)

I appreciate the critism (it was kind of unbelievable but then this is the result of watching too much romance anime... ;) lol) and I am working on posting a few of my more recent works (this was written... last year)I look foward to more of your feedback and thank you for taking the time to read this :)

Selishxiii, recomended this story to me and I read it! It really is very well written, your characters are so real and believable! But, I wish that there had been some indication of her lonliness and the loss of her parents at home when she was getting up from school. I think it would have enhanced the story even though you wanted to save that part of the story until your exsplanation to andrew. Like maybe her looking at her empty house, or looking at a picture, just to forshadow the reveil of her being an orphan and everything. And I do agree, the whole scene with andrew pulling her out of class and the students in the library was kind of unbelivable, you just need to figure out how things would occur in real life to make it more realistic. You are a very wonderful writer though, I must say. :D I really really enjoyed your writing besides parts that kind of made the story unrealistic. You have some talent definantly! I hope you don't find my suggestions rude in anyway, I'm just trying to help. :) I am so glad that I read this, keep up the writing and I will read more if you write any..I would love to see what happens!!

Selishxiii, recomended this story to me and I read it! It really is very well written, your characters are so real and believable! But, I wish that there had been some indication of her lonliness and the loss of her parents at home when she was getting up from school. I think it would have enhanced the story even though you wanted to save that part of the story until your exsplanation to andrew. Like maybe her looking at her empty house, or looking at a picture, just to forshadow the reveil of her being an orphan and everything. And I do agree, the whole scene with andrew pulling her out of class and the students in the library was kind of unbelivable, you just need to figure out how things would occur in real life to make it more realistic. You are a very wonderful writer though, I must say. :D I really really enjoyed your writing besides parts that kind of made the story unrealistic. You have some talent definantly! I hope you don't find my suggestions rude in anyway, I'm just trying to help. :) I am so glad that I read this, keep up the writing and I will read more if you write any..I would love to see what happens!!

Its is a great start, I love your descriptions, especially the beginning, but when he just dragged he out of class, it was a bit unbelievable that he'd just do that, it was odd. Other then that thought it was great, and I'll be sure to read more of your works when you post them :)

-SelishXIII