I started liking this character and this 'verse and then it suddenly ended. Tell more.

YES!!!!!!

YES!!!!!!

If I gave all that away in the first chapter then what would the rest of the book contain?

I hope you meant to include all that in following chapters, of which I have every intention of doing. :) Thanks!

YES!!! This story is "worth it." I would expand a little bit more on Zylena 's basic character and their world as well. She seems a bit more mature for her age than the others...why? What has made her this way? You state she is "uncomfortable" but I would give more descriptions of what and how. Why do they need to be physically closer? She gave in too easily to lying with a perfect stranger. You briefly mentioned her "father"...why is he important? Was he one of the men who come to share their power?

You have all the intrigue built in but be careful of being too cryptic. I look forward to more!

Greetings Ms. Strongheart,
You asked for feedback. Here's my take on this work.

You have the beginnings of an epic story. I come to that conclusion because you've made references to unique cultures, both Kylena's and her suitors'. A whole chapter or more could be dedicated to describing these cultures and how they view life, how they worship and how they perceive the supernatural.

A love sub-plot is always good, especially if it serves to augment a grander, more expansive tale.
Zylena may be the kind of woman who will never be controlled, whether by a man or any one else. If this is the case, you've set the groundwork for the reader to care about this independent individual. Getting the reader to care about one of your characters, whether good or bad, is a major accomplishment. I'd say you are on your way to writing a good book.

Being the critic that I am, I did see spelling errors and the misuse of some homonyms. Those, however, are fixable items.
Please write some more. Best wishes as you progress with this work.

By the way, I love the cover.
With warm regards,
Augustus.