dude best writer every

You are a really good author,I am really inspired by this book,can't wait to read the second!

WOW!!! This is such an AWESOME book!!! I just love how the ideas just flowed together. It was eventful, and and sometimes even heart stoping. I love it!!!

love this book can't wait on next one

I know, it's very cliche, but I'm still working on it, so I'm trying to make it darker, less 'oh I love you, you're cool, you're a vampire!' and a little more...morbid, exciting. I might just change a big part in the story. I understand that it is frustrating when a person writes 10-15 pages and calls it a novel. Espescially since I am a fast reader. This is literally my first real novel, it's my baby, and I know I need to improve it. I really do appreciate critiques, and I am really happy that I got an opinion. I know I need more action, but I think I had enough in the end that I might be starting on the right track.

Its sad to see how long this book is. You must have spent some time on it. Unfortunately it is a complete rewrite. I think you must be very young and your exposure to literature has been limited to things like Twilight and other prepubescent tripe. Without putting too fine of an edge on it, Toxic is just that.
Self indulgent fantasy. Expand your thought process beyond your own romantic fantasies and desires. There is one redeeming quality about it, at least you have enough imagination to write something that is a few rungs further up the ladder than Twilight fan fiction, but just barely. If I read one more story about a young girl falling in love with mysterious, deep, brooding, boy (who happens to be a vampire or a werewolf) with damaged souls that can only be helped by the brave young girl I will just give up on ever finding anyone with an original thought in their heads ever again. The word derivative does not say enough about this nightmarish tween driven pit that writing has fallen in to. Here is the bright side, you are young, you have an imagination and you obviously have the drive and motivation to write something long enough to be a real book without giving up on it a few chapters in. There are way too many people (especially young girls who write stuff that is just ten or fifteen pages of rambling nonsense and call it a novel) who think that a book is something that can be read in five minuets. You should always remember that you will have critics like me telling you how bad something is. Even the best writers in the world have critics. So you don't have to listen to me or them. But sometimes, if you can get over your own feelings being hurt, a critic can be your best friend because they will tell you the truth when your friends and others will lie right to your face and because of that you will never grow or become better at what you do.

Adding it to my faves, only made it half way through but it's amazing!!!!

Thanx, but I'm afraid that somewhere in the middle, It gets sparce on detail. I wish it didn't take forever to save on Bookrix!

You have a talent for writing! This book is awesome:)
Katie x

great book