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authorbea

I really liked this story. I too liked the point of view. GREAT TWIST!!!

Belinda

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xmeli.j.nightlyx

Aww so cute!!! I loved the kid POV. It was very well written.

Blessings
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Gelöschter User

Your writing was great, and it was a fun story. I wish I had some special incites that I could give, but I don't. What I do have a great big grin on my face after reading your tale. Thank you for that, and keep it up!

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felixthecat

Ha ha ha! Well done, Vanessa. Your narrator's voice was truly authentic...but I WANTED TO SEE HIM...well, I won't give the ending away. Loved the ending line:)

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Chris-Jean

Great story. I loved the play on words.

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pastiche247

A light and airy tale. Easy to read and brings a smile. Especially the twist - LOL

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gooduklady

Great job Vanessa. Perfect play on words and exactly how I envisaged the twist ending.....the line of the song to mean something entirely different, yet fit the story.

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paulashene

When we had our home school going we had 'dance' lesson in the form of ballet and most of the boys were 'game' for it especially after finding that a lot of the pros use the same exercises that ballet workouts incorporate.

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sereni

I liked it , that was cute.Serena

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vnbuckmaster

Voting is July 20-August 4th.

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