It was ok, need more kissing, it should have been longer and yeah I agree Bella's point of view and y did Edward say "As I love you I hope?" doesn't make sense for the story you know they love each other.
Good description though. More about Edward (need some).
it was good but you need to write some more about edward and bella and put it in bella's point of view
hi ummmm y did edward say "As I love u i hope?
~Obsessed Reader
Omg that was such a good little book nice use of words to twilightlol!