Oh Allison, what wonderful writing! I'm so glad that you changed the font so that I could read it, and then that Kashers mentioned your work, reminding me to come back and read the rest. I personally don't think you should edit it in any way. I love the way that the moon and the sun are ever-present, looking down on this family's secrets and obsessions. I give you my vote.

A plea for those of us who can't read the small print! I love the start of this story but just found I couldn't keep reading as the font was too small. If you make it bigger I really want to come back and read the rest

Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".

The Librarian