You captured it nicely:)
My vote!

Timmi--what a great story--your vivid imagery leaves the mind to wonder for itself for some time. I love the mystery of your words. Great short story!

I was taken back completely when I got to the lastsentence.

I was taken back completely when I got to the lastsentence.

great story,
greetings,
miluna

A good read - the atmosphere and the mood are well presented.

I did enjoy the repetition...it made the story sink in and reminded me of my own conscience gnawing away at me slowly trying to prepare me for the unforseen.

Well done!!

God bless,

Tyrone

I enjoyed the book even though it took me a few pages to get the gist of it. But a good book all the same.

I liked the repetition. The fast pace added to the intensity of the story.

Very good book. Fast moving but still good. It was something new.