I agree with Mr. Cleveland. Starting with the dog scene, then filling in your back story here and there would definitely pull your readers in more. This is an unusual story so it is very interesting to me. Good job. Robynn

In only two chapters the reader is drawn into the world surrounding Owen. The storyline is fine but how it is worked lends a clue to how successful the story might be. Editing might help the story a great deal but before that happens a revision of the action scenes is needed. Perhaps the 'dog' scene might be the intro to the whole book.

I heard about the contest, and thought this rough draft would be perfect for it. I didn't get a chance to edit the piece, but I do hope everyone enjoyed it.

I really enjoyed reading the first part of Owen. I think you have a nice imagination and i look forward to reading more about this you boy and his new family! Keep it up and i will keep my eyes open for more :)

loved the idea and the presentation. You have some work yo do on tightening up sentences but it should not be hard. Great starts deserve my vote!./joeparente./ great cover.