It did help alot and your right. I have so many story ideas reeling around in my head that I just get frustrated. Portal's the unfortunate result of that. I was determined to write and finish it in 1 night so I did. I read it over myself and found that I chopped alot out that I felt it needed so perhaps I'll go back to it again. Thanks so much for your comments they're very informative and I know I still have alot of work to do reguardless I am flattered by your kindness

You really have quite a talent at story plots. This is the first book I had read of yours so I went back and read Howl. I was quite impressed with the flow of the story, and your characterization. This is hard to give an opinion since it is artwork for you. But as a reader, I liked The Portal, it has tons of potential. It is in need of tightening, in spelling and sentence structure. I could tell in Howl you had worked to polish that story. The Portal seemed to be a rough draft. I would say flesh it out, build it. I agree with the others who said it could be a novel. You really are quite talented, you just need to work on grammar and spelling, just like I do. Thank you for sharing. Hope this helped. Robynn

I love the concept,you have potrayed the human emotions deeply. Fear,love,hate. I love this book. I feel sorry for not reading before or vote for such a gud one.

I really liked your premise here. Very intriguing and the idea of incorporating Belzeebub and the rest was good. I would suggest to look into some of your spellings and add more descriptions, but these are just my suggestions of course :) The ending was good though I would I wanted something happier. You can actually make a full novel out of this.

Overall, enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing :)

thanks

The idea is interesting...have voted :)