I very much enjoyed reading your work. Excellent! Extremely well done. There are a couple rough spots, but all together, extremely well done! You should be proud of yourself :)

The dialogue in the beginning was pleasing, as I can see how nervous and childlike the main character is, though he puts on a rough and mature facade to hide his fear of Rasputin from Rasputin :P
Thumbs up!

Now I hate to do this, but the paragraph after the three stars (***) is a bit choppy, as you start all the sentences with subjects(I, He, She, They, It, We, etc.). This makes your paragraph feel like a list. Yikes!

And I'd encourage you to go over your work again and make sure you haven't left out any necessary punctuation.

In the third paragraph after the three stars(***), it seems to me that your second sentence is a bit jumbled. You give a lot of descriptive words that are good, but feel somewhat mushed because of the long, wordy sentence. It is a possibility that you could break up that one sentence into two, or rearrange it's wording so it can be better understood.

Again, don't forget your punctuation! Most is spot on, but there are spots you forget commas.

Lastly, be careful you don't just list what your main character is doing. I'm not sure how you'd do it, but I think it'd be nice to add more personality to your narrative, or some type of unique voice.

Otherwise, the story was amazing. The beginning and middle-end parts were perfect, though the middle was a bit rough. But I really like the serious yet playful tone of the story. Bravo! And the dialogue, ah! Perfecto! :D Well done!

And as I already said, the ending was amazing. However, I would not be surprised if you continued to write a novel off of this piece. Again, well done!

Good luck in the contest, though I doubt you'll need it ;)

---RbG

I was also very entertained! I love the idea and how descriptive you were! :)

I've never, NEVER, read a book where characters pledge to steal and have no regrets in doing so. I was grinning ear-to-ear when I read the first paragraph!

That aside, I really do love you style of writing. Your words flow with one another and your description is nicely done.

Amazing work once more Timur.