amsome...loved it....... love 2 know more...u should right a seecond book

I started reading this a while ago but couldn't get back to it when you added the next part. Anyway, I finally did, and wanted to tell you it really kept my interest. At this point in the story, the brutality has been almost non-stop, so I'm hoping something will change for Skye very soon (huh - I'm already thinking about her as if she was a real person, which speaks volumes about how well you've written your characters!), and her life will get better. I'm also looking forward to the day her mother figures things out! I know you said this was still a rough copy, so I won't get into grammar or syntax stuff. Just promise you'll keep writing this; I feel like I know this girl and want to see her get some justice! Please be sure to let me know when the next part is posted? I am SO saving this to my favorites! :D

Hello all! I thank you all so very much for your support and critiques, they have really made me smile. Oh, and the hearts. It means a lot. ^_^
To all who say I need to edit it: yes, I know. This is only the rough draft of the story, it will be refreshed and edited after I've finished it. I do thank you for the tips, they really help. :)
Anyways, thank you a bunch for the all of the comments! I appreciate each and every one of them! :D
More chapters will hopefully be up soon. They're written already, just not read over. ^_^
Again, I thank you. <3

Love the cover. One little thing do a line edit, where you take the lines of speech and separate them from the rest of the text it makes it easier to read. Love the story keep up the good work :) ~Faith

Amazzzing book!! I've read it 6 times already. Please write more. I can't wait to find out what happens!!!!

This story will resonate with many women and young men whom have been in abusive relationships. There are a few instances where another simple word is needed within the sentence to make it flow a little easier. example" "at his neck" instead of "his neck." There are very few spelling errors, Bravo! So go back and have someone see if they can help you spot the few that are there. I would suggest breaking up your paragraphs a little. technically there is nothing wrong with them now but by making them shorter it becomes easier to read.

There are a few times where I feel you rush the story along and could have added a little more depth to your characters by adding more details, especially about the heroine. What does she look like? Why does she accept her boyfriend's abuse when she derides her father and mother's behavior? Is she bold on the outside but full of insecurities on the inside?

This is a great start to a very good story...keep it up!

It is sad that she suffers so much abuse, I do hope you write more and she has a wonderful happy ending by finding a gentle love.

welL! les than a perfect shows an young females journey through her own thoughts. Her decision,her struggle with her thoughts is sketched so well with having younger gen in mind. Neat job, long way to go!

Your characters have great depth and are believable. I would love to read more of this story.
Chris

I presume you are a teenager yourself, and I must say that you have done a pretty darn good job conveying your story line in a manner that will both appeal to and educate other young people. Your spelling and grammar are quite good but I am especially impressed with the way you are trying to educate other young women regarding abusive boyfriends. This will appeal to the under 21 female set, I am sure. My own critique for improvement would be this: Most of the time you have dialog, which you correctly enclose in quotation marks. However, instead of adding a comma before the end "quote" you make a separate sentence for (for example), he said, she said, he whispered, etc. These should not be separate sentences. They should follow what you have written as dialog. Apart from that one suggestion, I think you have done well.