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loved it!!!
I love this book, but u made some mistakes in ur book. so far, i hope u keep updating.
You have a few minor grammar and spelling issues. Some places you left out words, and other places are unnecessary words. I haven't seen anything that a couple of minutes won't fix, but make sure you wait at least a day or two before correcting your work because if you don't you won't be able to catch all the mistakes. Also a six-pack and a persons chest aren't the same thing, so it would be more technically correct if when... mehr anzeigen
Wow...I would. I must be very hungry bcuz I just wrote eat instead of read! Woops!!!
I really liked the update and can't wait to eat more. I just have a few tips for you...
...there's quite a few grammar errors (i.e. once you had put your instead of you're)! It's nothing major, but to some people that's enough to make them uninterested.
...also your p.o.v's aren't consistent. In the beginning of the book you swapped first person views with Annie and Darren, n in the last update in your book you out of knowhere... mehr anzeigen