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serena.1

i'll ket you know when I updaye hopefullt son and yes there more to the story than meet the eye. Its based up people it know or knew and the dangers in life, I,m righting this story to get message out

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Chris-Jean

Please message me when you write more.
Out of interest has the story any factual basis?
Chris

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bookworm1995

You got at awesome story to make it awesomeness you might want to polish it up. Just take a deep breath for the flow it seems a bit rushed in my opinion and you're missing some words here and there. But over all it's pretty awesom.
Angel Juarez

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serena.1

thanks for the warning. I go back and fix it I entend to do that and not on perpose. I kind of figures there would be mistakes. Thats why i only have it were friends can look at it write now. I'll have chapter 2 up soon and I'll fix it when I get the chance. Right I have a lot of homework since its near the end of school for me and Honestly I prefer third person But with the story It from Miranda P.O.V (point of view)Its... mehr anzeigen