I was in the office with Dela when he was writing this story. I did not know it is such a wonder story.

You have my vote. I wish I could vote more than once.

Dela is a colleague in the office. Now I know he has a wonderful writing talent. Keep it up boy.

A very touching story. For we Africans, it's a yearly experience.

What an informative and well told tale. You have a way of telling a story that made me want to read more. Thank you for sharing. I voted for you.

Many thanks for writing this graphic piece . It takes me, reminds me of another part of the Empire where city life for me as a child became constantly interrupted by the rain.People never forget but they do need reminding of disasters and how frail human life can be.

The pain and terror of unusual rains and the knowledge that you have of natural catastrophes come together isn a beautiful story of strength. I wish you would submit this story to CNN via the CNN IReports on the CNN website. Include your pictures. The time is now to save lives and prevent further damages.

This drew my attention and kept it. I could visualize the scenery before. It touched me. You have a story teller voice, one that many would sit down and await eagerly to hear the stories of their ancestors. Keep up the Great work. I gave you a vote. =-) I do hope the forecast may be wrong, and the effects of the rain won't be so harsh. I felt like I had fell upon a journal and I couldn't put it down until I read every last word. Marionottaway beat me to it and gave you a few tips in grammar and presentation of your story that will come in handy.

What you have written would make a fantastic National Geographic article complete with your own pictures. It might be a way of putting it out there for the world to appreciate what is happening in your neck of the planet. What I would suggest however is to resist combining past and present tense verbs in the same paragraph and sometimes sentences. That is bad grammar. I would write this story like a newshound would. Keep it all active verbs in the present tense to make the drama of life unfolding as if it were happening in the moment...as if the narrator was experiencing it as he wrote. The whole tale would gain major punch and reading impact if you did a rewrite and tried what I suggest. Also, each time you change a topic, move to a new speaker, or change a visual scene (which is fantastic to keep in as your style), you should be starting a new paragraph. That is how you know when to make a paragraph break. Please note that dialogue needs its own paragraph as do narrative paragraphs, paragraphs that change subjects or scenes, dialogue of one speak as well as dialogue of another speaker. Everything gets its own paragraph. Correct these minor faults and it will improve the readability immensely. Good Luck!

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A nice insight into the rainy season's effect on the people in West Africa.