That was the most unusual story of that genre (I won't say which to keep from spoiling it for other readers) I've ever read. Holy cow! Major chills! The ending was brilliant!
One or two minor issues - you changed tense several times, but that's very easy to fix; a couple of typos. Other than that, though, very nice and well-written. It had a good flow, and kept me literally on the edge of my seat from beginning to end.
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That was the most unusual story of that genre (I won't say which to keep from spoiling it for other readers) I've ever read. Holy cow! Major chills! The ending was brilliant!
One or two minor issues - you changed tense several times, but that's very easy to fix; a couple of typos. Other than that, though, very nice and well-written. It had a good flow, and kept me literally on the edge of my seat from beginning to end.
You do this kind of story extremely well, and I hope you write more like it!
I so glad I got you, Dave. LOL!
It needs work, but for someone like you, who is a very good mystery writer to have enjoyed it, I'm so pleased.
I plan to enter this in the YA contest, when it's ready. Thank so much again for reading and adding your lovely comment.