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You have my vote.
Chris
reallynola,
This is a nicely laid out story. It pulling the reader along towards the surprising end.
Jack
Much better indeed. Just change one word "The brutality of her experience HAD (not has)" and you will be set to go. This is deserving of many votes and I shall make sure everyone takes a look at this very fine and disturbing piece. You have my vote for a job well done. Val
Well, I went over the story and made some minor changes and corrections. If you would re-read and let me know what you think of the story now. Gooduklady. Thanks...Charlie
Charlie, I not only read your story, but I read all the comments praising it. I agree that your story has a great emotional impact and is very well done. However, because it is so short, and IF you want to win (which you could very well do with this one), please go back over it and fix (1) spelling (their, not thier), and make your tenses consistent. If you polish it up, you have a great chance with this one. If you need help... mehr anzeigen
Very nice story. It's good because it keeps you thinking and imagining after reading it. Maybe because I'm a law student that's why what I immediately thought of was his criminal liabilities knowing that he was in good faith. I also further thought of other things like what if the first man is a good friend of the wife? or his? It almost reminds me of the sad story of Gelert the dog. I hope you're familiar with it! :)
You have a good story even with limited number of words. Although I was able to guess the ending, you presented it very well. How did I guess it? First, the doctor said that there’s a slight chance of recovery. This implies the patient might be suffering a deeper mental disorder. Second, I’m a Psychologist. Sorry about that, but I enjoyed reading it. I leave it to others readers to find out the Stormy Night Ride experience of... mehr anzeigen
Thanks to all of you for the wonderful reception received. Charlie
THIS WAS AN AWESOME STORY.THE ENDING WAS UNEXPECTED.