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dholm1

When I first saw this was so short I was a little worried. Wow! I wouldn't change anything as far as the story goes. This is perfect flash fiction. A couple awkward sentences in the beginning, but nothing terrible. Good job and definitely deserves a vote if you enter it in something. This one will stick with me for a while. :-)

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patricia.books.works

I wanted to know what happened to the man hit by the car. Did the husband get into trouble for his act of revenge?

You told a lot of story in a few words. It's nice to be able to do that.

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lovingempath

This is heavier than the three pages indicate. Lots of unspoken words here.
Good job with making something really short, but very powerful!
Robin