okay um wow i hav to say not the best but if u add more detail and relate to the story more in the way of nessie being so intelegent but i like the idea of bellas new power! hope that helped :)
this was a terrible storyh she half humam she barley has a pulse
it wuznt tht good read a better book on hear called trails of renesmee by ama
U have a good idea but u have to prof read and put more detail in. if u do that it'll be GREAT!!! =)
i love it you should write mor it sounds like one day in the future it will be in a libary all over the world
