loved it just watch your words and proof read

Your concenpt is interesting. You need a good proofreader. I get the impression you are a young writer. You may have talent; keep working to develop it and do not be afraid to listen to suggestions and criticism.

Your concenpt is interesting. You need a good proofreader. I get the impression you are a young writer. You may have talent; keep working to develop it and do not be afraid to listen to suggestions and criticism.