Love it keep working on it. I want to know what happens next

It's got a good plot but its just randomly ended and you have no proper punctuation or capitalization making it very hard to read.

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(Five Star Book)
I really liked this book, it was very different from other vampire books I read, and that's a good thing. :)
I really hope you go after this talent you have in creative writing. I am not like a teacher or anything but I would give you an A+ on this book. Please continue writing!!!

Caitlin S.

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thank you

ill work out the details thanks for the tips

i will thanks

i havent finished typing it

good book XD you might want to add more details about the characters and check spelling. transition was ok but a bit confusing. explain a little more about the beginning and probably elaborate why everyone liked the master and add the real brother in the story if you add him in the beginning.
*you do not need to do all this. it is just some suggestions from a unexperienced 13 year old :D
i really like the plot although the vampire par was confusing

i didnt think the book was too bad, the spelling needed checking and the book needs to be longer. it ended as i was beggining to get into it.
overall a good job. xx