Review - This is definitely a story in progress. Attention getting, question raising. Of course as mentioned before me, it needs editing. You have captured well the mind of a teenager, with the roiling emotions. I wonder what she is really. Keep going and working on it. I would like to read what you add. Good job. Robynn

Well, yeah, grammar issues. But that aside, this is a very well-told, intriguing story! You have some wonderful imagery, and the emotions are expressed extremely well. Some of the language and implied situations are a bit too mature for the rating you gave it, but otherwise this has a lot of great potential. I hope you keep at it - it's not the typical "creature feature" and I really enjoyed reading it. 'D