A delightful tale of a memory past that still lives in the present.

Hi Miranda, I just wanted to say that I really loved this short piece. You do such an amazing job of filling your reader with such emotion, the images were beautifully written. I was touched by your words, and the moment the baby opens her eyes and sneezes, I thought it was absolutely adorable. I felt like I was there, witnessing this tiny miracle.

Good luck and I can't wait to see what you have in store for your next book. :)

What a beautiful story!

Dear Miranda, your pen has sketched a beautiful sneeze of a tiny baby born prematurely.your description of the sneeze as faint whisper is very nice.To quote you,"the very first and the joy of that moment still pierces my heart like an arrow accross the gentle arc of the years"....this line is very grand and beautiful. Thank you my dear for sharing the beautiful small piece with us. Thank you for your immediate response on commenting my small piece of mpoetry I have sent. good night dear. I am impressed with the site and I will surely write poems here. ....with love, ceegee

Thanks for the comments Petra. Good of you to vote

grabbed me by the heart, Miranda! So poignant and the emotions expressed were so vivid! I felt the anxiety and the joy of relief. Such a wonderful ending, thankfully, for you!

Good luck, Miranda! Petra :))

Your story captures the most wonderful gift of GOD, that of giving birth to a tiny human being from nothingness...His first cry, his first touch, his first sneeze will certainly linger on in your memory forever...Thnx for shering your experience with us. Voted.

Much too soon...I was caught in the moment, a by-stander, stilled in one of life's most mysterious gifts...the birth of a child. I was pulled into your awe, joy, fear, and wonderment. But...much too soon did you let me go; I was poised to hear more, to share in the touch-and-go struggle, to cry tears of relief, to feel your heart swell in victory. True, the last sentence was telling, but the onset was so powerful a scene that it begged for more...just as I do! Thanks, Miranda, for a family story, a mother's burden, and a grand memoir to treasure. Wa do, Elizabeth. You will be in my favorite list.

Hi Miranda - lovely name - lovely story. Personally I feel the brevity complements the title and the content - it says it all. Prems are always traumatic - but they bring an extra special blessing as they develop. You have captured the moment which is what a short story is all about - perfect. JOHN

I liked your story, your sharing of your experience. I personally believe that the story is a tad too short. Perhaps a longer story would hook the readers' attention more. Just a suggestion. Keep writing. Voted!